We were learning to write a moment in time but still make it descriptive.
Introduction: I wanted to stay on the tramp but it was on fire. So I had to go inside.
As I walked inside I collapsed on the couch Crossing arms with anger. I feel like a ice block mounting right now.I was wearing sports outfit but I was still too hot.I had a red face like a tomato.I was sighing because it was like a hundred degrees outside.I felt mad because all I wanted was to go on my tramp but it's too boiling it felt like I was on mars or in a Australia.My face started to cry there was so much sweat it looked like I was crying.My eyes rolled with exertion.It felt like my mouth was going to drop. I had sunblock on but still got burnt. My heart was pounding like lightning.My hands turned all puffy.
Conclusion: I was wishing it wasn’t so hot as it is today.
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