My amazing writing about the park

The park was icy like you were on a ski field.The ice was sparkling on the grass at the park.You could feel the icy grass melting on your feet and the wind swishing all around you.The flowers were trying to bloom out of their shell. There was a whole meadow of flowers and grass. Also bushes. The trees were covered in leaves. There was so many that it reminded me that I saw a man in a shop with so many tattoos. That’s what the tree looked like. There was different kinds of trees. You could hear birds chirping and singing with excitement because finally summer was here. You could taste polon off the flowers.

 

     what I found challenging is to find better verbs and and make it instersting for the reader. by jamielee